请帮我改下英语专八作文On attending CET4 and CET6 repeatedlyWhen attending to college, there is an examination that every student has to takeinto consideration that a high mark represents a strong evidence for a goodcommand of English. As a

请帮我改下英语专八作文On attending CET4 and CET6 repeatedlyWhen attending to college, there is an examination that every student has to takeinto consideration that a high mark represents a strong evidence for a goodcommand of English. As a
请帮我改下英语专八作文
On attending CET4 and CET6 repeatedly
When attending to college, there is an examination that every student has to takeinto consideration that a high mark represents a strong evidence for a goodcommand of English. As a result, it comes to a phenomenon that many studentsare attending CET-4 or CET-6 again and again.
When talking about this issue, people’s opinions vary from person to person. On theone hand, on the ground of competition environment, the better students arepreferred to be chosen by enterprises. For , sometimes, the higher marks relateto stronger ability. In order to keep up with the demands of enterprises,students have to take much more time to concentrate on the exams. Thoughseveral times of practical experience, college students found the way to have abetter perform in the exams.
On the other hand, seriously speaking, marks don’t represent the ability. Manystudents take the exam repeatedly to adapt to the need of society, yet ignoringthe another ability---working experience. They spend couples of time and moneyto get a higher mark, but may not learn some useful skills. Working in ancorporation, requires communication skills, the sense of cooperation, accurateobserving ability and so on. Higher marks don’t stand for everything.
Personally speaking, some times, the full mark may be a proof for one’s learning ability,but it doesn’t show every facet of a person. If we only focus on it, we mightlose the chance to improve ourselves.

请帮我改下英语专八作文On attending CET4 and CET6 repeatedlyWhen attending to college, there is an examination that every student has to takeinto consideration that a high mark represents a strong evidence for a goodcommand of English. As a
使用 "when / while doing,+ 主句" 的结构时,主句的主语务必与 "(when) doing" 的行为者是同一个.所以不能说 "when attending college,THERE IS xxxx" ,而且那样行文也过于冗长,完全可以简化为 The CET 4/6 exam is a daunting task to all college students.

ON ATTENDING CET4 & CET6 REPEATEDLY
When attending to college, there are two examinations that every student has to take into consideration: CET4 and CET 6. A high mark in these exams represents ...

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ON ATTENDING CET4 & CET6 REPEATEDLY
When attending to college, there are two examinations that every student has to take into consideration: CET4 and CET 6. A high mark in these exams represents a strong evidence for a good command of English. As a result, it comes to a phenomenon that many students are taking CET-4 or CET-6 again and again.
When talking about this issue, people’s opinions vary from person to person. On one hand, in an environment of fierce competition, the higher-scoring students are preferred by enterprises. because normally the higher marks relate to stronger ability. In order to keep up with the demands of enterprises, students have to take much more time to concentrate on the exams. Though several times of practical experience, college students found the way to have abetter performance in the exams.
On the other hand, seriously speaking, marks don’t justify the ability. Many students take the exam repeatedly to adapt to the need of society, yet ignoring another ability---working experience. They spend a lot of time and money to get a higher mark, but may not learn any useful skills. Working in a corporation requires communication skills, the sense of cooperation, accurate observing ability and so on. Higher marks don’t stand for everything.
Personally speaking, the full mark may be a proof for one’s learning ability, but it doesn’t show every facet of a person. If we only focus on it, we migh tlose the chance to improve ourselves in a better way.
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